I think the way you arranged all the shots are working well. The characters all clearly have their own personalities. I think you did a good job making this look like a reality show and it came out pretty funny. Some of the shots may have went on a little long. The shot where the girls knock on the door seems rushed. And the only last criticism I have is that one girls flip flops, the sound of them is annoying ha.
This is a hell of a lot better than the first shots I saw. The characters are a little more believable. You have some decent shots but I think th e movie needs some pep. It gets a little boring.
Dam... that was funny as hell. There needs to be a part where he says the "I'm sorry its not you" but other than that this is pretty solid. I think with some color changes and maybe some sort of effect on the dance scenes, that will make those instances pop out like no tomorrow. In comparison to what we saw last time which was some boo boo, this takes the cake and blows it to hell. Anyhoot, it needs some tightening to it on some scenes, just a second or two more. Also just a bit more music to be added throughout this piece. You need to get one of those MTV hits cds that come out for every month that have recent hits on it. It'll make the reality thing even more prominent through it. The knocking scene Wes mentions is a bit rushed. It needs a little more to it.
Okay. Much improved from last week. There are a few minor things like the girls catching a glimpse of the camera. But other than that, this is a tight edit. However the BLACK comments must go. I mean its already controversial due to the fact of these girls being of different ethnicities. Or Is this a piece about interracial dating? If so find some other way of saying it instead of "once you go black you never go back" and "I love me some dark woman" it may read as being kind of offensive; if "you" the artist, was black or white.
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I think the way you arranged all the shots are working well. The characters all clearly have their own personalities. I think you did a good job making this look like a reality show and it came out pretty funny. Some of the shots may have went on a little long. The shot where the girls knock on the door seems rushed. And the only last criticism I have is that one girls flip flops, the sound of them is annoying ha.
This is a big improvement. But I think that you need to make it a little bit tighter. This does feel more like a reality show.
There are couple of shoots that you can make shorter, like when obsession is rubbing her hands together.
Also the introduction of a late shy needs to be established better. The introduction of the ladies is a little rocky.
You also need a pick-up shoot on when he verbally chooses Shy over the other girls. It just moves to quickly from the dance scene to the final scene.
I think that a love song can be added at the end as your leading man looks into the camera as he is hugging Shy.
This is a hell of a lot better than the first shots I saw. The characters are a little more believable. You have some decent shots but I think th e movie needs some pep. It gets a little boring.
Dam... that was funny as hell. There needs to be a part where he says the "I'm sorry its not you" but other than that this is pretty solid. I think with some color changes and maybe some sort of effect on the dance scenes, that will make those instances pop out like no tomorrow. In comparison to what we saw last time which was some boo boo, this takes the cake and blows it to hell. Anyhoot, it needs some tightening to it on some scenes, just a second or two more. Also just a bit more music to be added throughout this piece. You need to get one of those MTV hits cds that come out for every month that have recent hits on it. It'll make the reality thing even more prominent through it. The knocking scene Wes mentions is a bit rushed. It needs a little more to it.
Okay. Much improved from last week. There are a few minor things like the girls catching a glimpse of the camera. But other than that, this is a tight edit. However the BLACK comments must go. I mean its already controversial due to the fact of these girls being of different ethnicities. Or Is this a piece about interracial dating? If so find some other way of saying it instead of "once you go black you never go back" and "I love me some dark woman" it may read as being kind of offensive; if "you" the artist, was black or white.
I think the film was shot and lighted well. some of the acting seemed fake but for the most part it was very much like a reality show.
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